What do you think of my poem?

Aphrodite cast a spell on me...

much stronger than Athena, has bestowed her gift on me.

I plead for the service of Hermese,

that this ardor be conveyed to the worthy one.

I aspire to be the rightful mate of Eros,

and wait till my psyche be set free.



Take me to the voyage of Odysseus . For I will travel the cruelest sea,

just to be home with my sweet Penolope,

no matter how immense is the anguish waiting.



If the cherished has met his doom

I will be Theseus, to give breath to my flute

Enthrall Hades to his soul

Just to lay my eyes on you once more



Apology to Zeus, I seem not to discern the calling.

For the songs of sirens are beguiling.

Alluring me to shed tears with them.

They all long to be with you.



How I wish I could be Daphne, the love of Apollo…

When fate couldn’t catch me, just turn me

into a heartless and harmless tree.

Then I will love and hurt no more.

What do you think of my poem?
Beatiful
Reply:l think that it is beatiful !!

so keep writting
Reply:Good poem but the subject bored me, well u asked.

Keep Writting!
Reply:I loved it!

really unique, and the mythollogy alliteration makes it awesome!!!! -i have studied it alot and understand all that u are saying! :)

your personality as a poet really shines through..it is very cleverly written but also very meaningful



once again, i loved it!!!!

hope you keep writing more and post them!!

-wish i could write like u.



:)
Reply:Просто замечательно! так странно, что люди в наше время ещё могут так мыслить и писать. ты - молодчина! так держать! я ещё хочу почитать твои стихи. жду.
Reply:I love it! Your use of mythology to express your feelings is really unique. Your knowledge of greek mythology is quite imppressive, although the reader has to know alot about greek mythology. I would love to see more poems based on greek mythology, but with different feelings and themes. Keep writing!
Reply:wow just wow omg just wow thats the only thing i can say its wonderful!!!!!
Reply:this poem is awesome!!! keep it uo!!
Reply:good one
Reply:You are a student of mythology and you have a knack for remembering each god's "story," which is something I can only do with the major gods.



You have a facility for writing in a style that is fairly appropriate to the subject matter.



You've taken on a big challenge here, in my humble opinion. First off, we can admire, but it's hard to relate to, your knowledge of mythology. I think what the expression lacks, for me, is connectivity. I am not sure each stanza brings me to the next. In other words, I did not get the sense that from stanza to stanza there was some continuous story that I was following. It felt more like a display of something you didn't quite know what to do with but are possibly enthralled with.



The ending did help me to get a better sense of the connectivity you probably intended, i.e., it's all about love. I felt a little inadequate that I didn't see that until the end. I think I got too caught up in the individual stanzas and trying to remember who each god was, rather than feeling the relationship of each stanza to the next. This is probably my fault.



At the same time, the ending wasn't perfect sense. If you are turned into a heartless tree you cannot love, although it's true you will not hurt. It might have worked for me better if you were simply turned into a harmless tree. That way you could still say you will love and hurt no more.
Reply:Great. Confusing to someone who knows nothing of Greek mythology but great anyway.
Reply:I am impressed by your knowledge of mythology.



But where can I find the main theme of this poem?
Reply:Nice, I got lost since I know nothing about Greek mythology. Keep writing, you are brilliant.

Oh, I see, you take us to the different charact---I get it.

Well done.