Will someone proof read this please? I'll give you 10 points!?

i'd really appreciate it!







One way Alfred Hitchcock's film "The Birds" was changed from Daphne du Maruier's short story was in the film, there is a couple trying to survive instead of a family. This would definatley make the viewers more intrested to watch as the two strive to help eachother fight the birds throughout the movie. It makes the movie more suspenseful as it makes you ask yourself "Will they stay together?", and "Will it be hapily ever after?" Another way this film was changed to fit the golden screen was the drama throughout the movie; from Annie being jelous of Melanie because of Mitch, to Lydia not thinking anyone deserved her son.

Will someone proof read this please? I'll give you 10 points!?
Alfred Hitchcock's film, "The Birds", was changed in quite a few ways from Daphne du Maruier's short story. One way in which it was altered can be found in the fact that there is a couple trying to survive, rather than an entire family. This captures the audience better, as they watch the two work together to fight the birds throuought the film. The factor of suspence becomes more prominent, seeing as the audience wonders : "Will they stay together? Will it be happily ever after?" Furthermore, the movie heightens the drama; from Annie envying Melanie because of Mitch to Lydia not thinkinf anuone deserved her son.

It is amazing how many alterations are made between novel and film!



Hope I helped!
Reply:Spelling:

definatley = definently

intrested = interested

eachother = each other

hapily= happliy

jelous = jealous



Grammar:

"...as it makes you ask yourself, 'Will they ... '"

you need a comma before a quotation.
Reply:In the first sentence, you should say "there was a couple...". In the beginning of the sentence, you used past tense. In the second part of the sentence, you used "is" a present tense verb.

You misspelled "definitely" and "interested."

"...Interested to watch..." should be "...interested in watching."

"Eachother" should be split into two words.

Happily is misspelled.

"Will it be happily ever after?" doesn't make a lot of sense. Say "Will (character's name) live happily ever after?" or "Will there be a happy ending?"

Jealous is misspelled.

Turn the semicolon into a period. Then change everything after that to a single sentence. This will require adding a couple of words.
Reply:thats great just don't forget to indent tt
Reply:You sounded desperate for someone to read your message, so I read it. And, to tell you the truth, it's not very interesting.



Do I get my 10 points now?
Reply:One way Alfred Hitchcock's film "The Birds" was changed from Daphne du Maruier's short story was in the film. There is a couple trying to survive instead of a family. This would definitley make the viewers more interested in watching, as the two strive to help each other fight the birds throughout the movie. It makes the movie more suspenseful as you ask yourself "Will they stay together?", and "Will they live happily ever after?"

Another way this film was changed to fit the golden screen was the drama throughout the movie; from Annie being jealous of Melanie because of Mitch, to Lydia thinking no one was good enough for her son.





*** Hope this was helpful. Good Luck***
Reply:You might want to split up the first sentence-it doesn't exactly roll off the tongue.

Don't use the word 'it' in an essay if you can word the sentence otherwise.

Other than that, this seems very well-written. : )
Reply:One way that Alfred Hitchcock's film, "The Birds", was changed from Daphne du Maurier's short story was that there is a couple trying to survive instead of a family. This would definitely make

it more interesting to watch as the two strive to help each other fight the birds throughout the movie. It makes the movie more suspenseful as it makes you ask yourself:



Will they stay together and will it be happily ever after?



Another way this film was changed to fit the golden screen was the drama throughout the movie from Annie being jealous of Melanie because of Mitch to Lydia not thinking anyone deserved her son.